稍作文 “章” 第213期：托福写作weekly

让步如何写？

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

本文立场：缺点大于优点

Admittedly, mass mediadohave their bright sides.For instance, Sesame Street, one educational TV program in the U.S., which was once very popular among children.The young people can learn various scientific knowledge and discoveries in it. What’s more, the characters are very entertaining and humorous, which make children love it even more.→与关键词联系性不强

这篇习作在让步段的一开始连接词和思路都使用正确了，但是在进入论述的部分没有抓住题目中the way young people behave这一关键词，因此文中出现的论述偏题的问题。

修改版：

Admittedly, mass mediadohave their bright sides.For instance, Sesame Street, one educational TV program in the U.S., which was once very popular among children. By being imparted the scientific knowledge and discoveries in an entertaining way, most children who watch the program willbe more desperate to learn anything about the unknown world by themselves or with peers.【对应文章中关键词：the way young people behave/举例论证】However, from my perspective, given the current situation, the dark sides of media definitelyoutrun the bright ones.【反驳仍然考虑文章主题】

那么除了举例，让步还可以用其他方式来写么？万能的说理办法也可以，那么接下来我们来看一个说理版本的让步段。

说理版

Admittedly, mass mediadohave their bright sides.After being delicately designed, many protagonists in movies and television would have positive attitude andmarvelous abilities. Also, they are set to save the world byconquering with the evil and would get the happy ending. Through such kind of programs, the youth can form a positive value about the world like great power means great responsibility or justice is invincible.【说理论证】However, 此处省略

本文名师

王琳

新航道南京学校写作名师。香港城市大学TESOL硕士。英语专业出身。剑桥商务英语高级证书拥有者。从事专业教学4年，对雅思托福类语言考试有严谨的教学思路和丰富的教学经验，独创的“平行作文法”能够激发学生写作欲望、突破写作低分瓶颈。对英语教学工作充满热情，课堂结合学生的特点因材施教，收到学生无数好评。

更多留学咨询，评论即可获取哦